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“Flying Car” Wrecks House

 

A Yorkshire family had a nightmare experience yesterday when they got unexpected guests in their living room.

 

Yesterday in Yorkshire, a family of 4 was shocked when a flying car came right thru the window. One of the kids was almost hit by the car. The driver of the car passed out when a bird crashed with him. He drove a convertible so the bird hit him straight in the head. When he passed out he drove right into a construction site. On the building field there was a ramp that he and the car when droved into. They jumped and flied into the living room too the poor family. The mother in the family was stunned by the episode and had never heard about anything similar. She said that they are going too move in the apartment in the 10th floor because this episode. The youngest is just 10 years old, and many psychologist fears that he is damaged for life. The older son who is 17 years old did get hit by the car. He broke his left arm and leg. He is now in the hospital for surgery and the doctors said that he is going to be okay. The Driver of the car is in the hospital also but have no serious damaged. Just some bruises and a broken arm. He has made an official apologise and hopes the family will accept it. He never wanted this to happen. The father in the family says that the driver didn’t do this on purpose so he is excused for the flying car.

The mother is still in shock and is treated by the crisis team at this moment.

The workers that watched the whole episode describes it’s like an impossible episode. How the car just tacked off and went flying in the air and landed in some others living room.

The insurance companies are now arguing about which of them who have to come up with the money. Either the workers insurance ore the drivers.

But no humans have been killed and that’s the most important.

[St Thicket]

“Flying Car” Wrecks House

 

A Yorkshire family had a nightmare experience yesterday when they got unexpected guests in their living room.

 

Yesterday in Yorkshire, a family of 4 was shocked when a car came flying right through the window (kanskje presisere at det er et hus det er snakk om?). One of the kids was almost hit by the car. The driver of the flying car passed out when a bird crashed with him. He drove a convertible so the bird hit him straight in the head. When he passed out he drove right into a construction site. On the building field there was a ramp that he and the car then droved into. They jumped and flied into the living room too the poor family. The mother in the family was stunned by the episode and had never heard about anything similar. She said that they are going too move in the apartment in the 10th floor because this episode. The youngest is just 10 years old, and many psychologist fear that he is damaged for life. The older son who is 17 years old did get hit by the car. He broke his left arm and leg. He is now in the hospital for surgery and the doctors sais (må være nåtid) that he is going to be okay. The Driver of the car is in also the hospital also but have no serious damages. Just some bruises and a broken arm. He has made an official apologise and hopes the family will accept it. He never wanted this to happen. The father in the family says that the driver didn’t do this on purpose so he is excused for the flying car.

The mother is still in shock and is treated by the crisis team at this moment.

The workers that watched the whole episode describes it’s like an impossible episode. How the car just tacked off and went flying in the air and landed in some's living room.

The insurance companies are now arguing about which of them who have to come up with the money; either the workers insurance or the drivers.

But no humans have been killed and that’s the most important.

 

 

 

Dette er et forslag til endringer. Ellers syntes jeg at du hadde et godt språk i teksten.

EDIT: For å få litt mer flyt i språket kan du gjøre om slik at det blir flere leddsetninger...

Endret 29. november 2006 av St Thicket

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