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[Anonym5656]

Har fått en mini oppgave om og skrive et lite refferat av Adrian Mole(hefte vi fikk på skolen) og lurte om noen ser noen store gramatikk feil eller lignende på den? Eller er det noen settninger jeg kunne skrevet anneledes?

 

Adrian Mole.

Adrian Mole is a diary that starts at New Years eave. Adrian Mole is a boy at the age of 13 3\4, and he has just got his first spot in his face. Adrian’s parents live still together but their relationship is getting weaker and weaker.

Adrian’s family does also have a dog. The dog is always sick or in some other kind of trouble, and it spends almost as must time at the vet, as it does at home.

 

Adrian thinks he’s an intellectual (but maybe not that intellectual after all), and writes some poems from time to time. He did also send a poem to the BBC.

 

Like most of all other teenagers, Adrian is in love. The girls name is Pandora. Pandora sits next to Adrian in geography class, but Adrian is a bit shy, so he doesn’t dear to say anything to her.  Later, Adrian’s best friend Nigel starts to hang out with Pandora. This is crushing Adrian’s heart, and his best friend Nigel is now he’s ex-best friend.

 

Adrian have some tasks. Every early morning he does a paper-round in the neighbourhood, and he is also visiting an old man named Bert. Adrian and Bert don’t like each other that much, but later they are turning out more friendly.

Adrian’s neighbour, Mr. And Mrs. Lucas are almost in the same situation as Adrian’s parents. Mr. Lucas is a very good friend to Adrian’s mom and is often visiting her. Later in the diary, Mr. And Mrs. Lucas is getting a devours.

 

Adrian isn’t that happy about school. Everyday he have to pay a guy called Barry Kent all he’s dinner money, and since Adrian isn’t that big and scary, he has no choice but pay the man.

 

The last thing that happens is that he’s mom tells him that they are getting devoured, but Adrian doesn’t get that upset cause he knew this was coming.

[teveslave]

Adrian Mole.

Adrian Mole is a diary that starts at New Years eave. Adrian Mole is a boy at the age of 13 3\4, and he has just got his first spot in his face. Adrian’s parents live still together but their relationship is getting weaker and weaker.

Adrian’s family does also have a dog. The dog is always sick or in some other kind of trouble, and it spends almost as must time at the vet, as it does at home.

 

Adrian thinks he’s an intellectual (but maybe not that intellectual after all), and writes some poems from time to time. He did also send a poem to the BBC.

 

Like most of all other teenagers, Adrian is in love. The girls name is Pandora. Pandora sits next to Adrian in geography class, but Adrian is a bit shy, so he doesn’t dear to say anything to her.  Later, Adrian’s best friend Nigel starts to hang out with Pandora. This is crushing Adrian’s heart, and his best friend Nigel is now he’s ex-best friend.

 

Adrian have some tasks. Every early morning he does a paper-round in the neighbourhood, and he is also visiting an old man named Bert. Adrian and Bert don’t like each other that much, but later they are turning out more friendly.

Adrian’s neighbour, Mr. And Mrs. Lucas are almost in the same situation as Adrian’s parents. Mr. Lucas is a very good friend to Adrian’s mom and is often visiting her. Later in the diary, Mr. And Mrs. Lucas is getting a devours.

 

Adrian isn’t that happy about school. Every day he have to pay a guy called Barry Kent all he’s dinner money, and since Adrian isn’t that big and scary, he has no choice but to pay the man.

 

The last thing that happens is that he’s mom tells him that they are getting devoured, but Adrian doesn’t get that upset cause he knew this was coming.

 

Har markert det jeg finner av feil med rødt, og det jeg ville skrevet om og gjerne utdypet med blått.

Du bør være lit obs på forskjellene mellom he's (he is) og his.

 

Pirkete: Du bruker feil apostrof (du skriver Adrian’s, men det skal være Adrian's).

[Anonym5656]

Pirkete: Du bruker feil apostrof (du skriver Adrian’s, men det skal være Adrian's).

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Har ikke noe å si, skal være håndskrevet uansett

 

Tusen tusen takk!

[teveslave]

You're welcome Hvis du lurer på noe av rettingen, bare si ifra. Men man lærer mest når man finner ut ting selv ...

[Anonym5656]

Jepp. TriTrans er bra

 

Her er en selvrettet verson, hvis noen orker å se på den:

 

Adrian Mole.

Adrian Mole is a diary that starts at New Years eve. Adrian Mole is a boy at the age of 13 3\4, and he has just got his first spot in his face. Adrian’s parents’ lives still together but their relationship is getting weaker and weaker.

Adrian’s family does also have a dog. The dog is always sick or in some other kind of trouble, and it spends almost as much time at the vet, as it does at home.

 

Adrian thinks he’s an intellectual (but maybe not that intellectual after all), and writes some poems from time to time. He did also send a poem to the BBC.

 

Like most of all other teenagers, Adrian is in love. The girl’s name is Pandora. Pandora sits next to Adrian in geography class, but Adrian is a bit shy, so he doesn’t dare to say anything to her.  Later, Adrian’s best friend Nigel starts to hang out with Pandora. This is crushing Adrian’s heart, and his best friend Nigel is now his ex-best friend.

 

Adrian has some tasks he got to do itch day. Every early morning he does a paper-round in the neighbourhood, and he is also visiting an old man named Bert. Adrian and Bert don’t like each other that much, but later they both realise that it would be better if they were friendlier to itch other.

Adrian’s neighbour, Mr. And Mrs. Lucas are almost in the same situation as Adrian’s parents. Mr. Lucas is a very good friend of Adrian’s mom and is often visiting her. Later in the diary, Mr. And Mrs. Lucas are getting a divorce.

 

Adrian isn’t that happy about school. Itch day he have to pay a classmate called Barry Kent all his dinner money, and since Adrian isn’t that big and brave, he has no choice but pay the man.

 

The last thing that happens is that his mom tells him that his parents are getting divorced, but Adrian doesn’t get that upset because he knew this was coming.

Endret 8. mai 2006 av Gakkakk

[teveslave]

to itch = å klø

itch = kløe

 

Du mener sikkert each

 

Den siste setningen blir også litt feil mtp subjekt/objekt:

"... his mom tells him that his parents are getting divorced ... " - moren er jo den ene forelderen, så det blir ikke riktig å skrive det sånn.

 

Ville forresten også satt Adrian Mole i anførselstegn i den aller første setningen, for du referer til at det er navnet på en dagbok der, og ikke gutten.

 

Ville også kalt denne Barry Kent for en "bully" eller no, i stedet for classmate.

Ellers ser det bra ut.

[Anonym5656]

to itch = å klø

itch = kløe

 

Du mener sikkert each 

 

hehehe, Der ser man

 

Den siste setningen blir også litt feil mtp subjekt/objekt:

"... his mom tells him that his parents are getting divorced ... " - moren er jo den ene forelderen, så det blir ikke riktig å skrive det sånn.

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Ja, det ser jeg. Hva om jeg skriver ".. that happens is that his mom tells him that she and his dad are getting an divorce, but.."

 

Blir det riktig\bedre?

[teveslave]

Ja, det ser jeg. Hva om jeg skriver ".. that happens is that his mom tells him that she and his dad are getting an divorce, but.."

 

Blir det riktig\bedre?

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Jepp, det høres bedre ut. Bare en liten slurvefeil der; a, og ikke an, divorce.

Endret 8. mai 2006 av teveslave