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[sjoan93]

1 VGS , Almenn.

 

Hei , eg har skreve denne stilen og fekk sjansen til å forbedre den siden den var litt dårlig. oppgåven var at vi skulle skrive ein artikkel om multi cultural societies. Fekk beskjed om å sette inn tekstbindingsord , men vetkje kor eg skal sette da inn.

også skrive fulstendige setningar .

Ein god del grammatik feil.

også bedre struktur , siden det var artikkel.

 

Takker for all hjelp som eg kan få av dåke

 

 

 

Would you prefer? a picture of air balloons with only one color, or different colors? A Society with only one culture, or many cultures?

 

Can you imagine a world where everybody are thinking and acting like each other?

 

Multi-cultural societies are societies where people have different cultures. That means different food, language, clothes, thinking, rules, religion and more. We have many cultures in our world. In many countries there are different cultures. But almost every country has an officially culture which presents the country. One of the most important things to mention when we explain culture is religion. Religion is a part of human thinking and acting. Religion decides how much of our body we can show. It has also an important role of our food; in some religions you can’t eat some sorts of food because it’s against the laws of the religion.

 

In the United States of America there are many different cultures. The reason is that immigrants from all over Europe immigrated to America and settled down. Most immigrants came from Spain, Ireland, England, Asia , Italy and some from Norway. After a while they got a government. USA became a Country with many states. The white people are the majority because most of the Americans originate from Europe. Today USA Is multi-cultural society , without so many problems , but there have been troubles in USA because of different cultures in the past.

 

Kurds are one of the biggest societies which don’t have their own country. There are many different cultures in the Kurdish society. There are different religions in Kurdistan, Muslims, Christians, Jude’s, and yzidi. Their live differently have different food, different houses, and different clothes. Kurdistan was split in 4 after First World War. The country had one culture before they split it, but after that it became a part of 4 other countries therefore there are different cultures now. The yzidi have always been in the Kurdish society. Their culture is very different from the other cultures. They have their own religion, food, clothes, and rules. People from other cultures can’t become yzidi because they don’t accept new members in their society. Yzidi are not really Kurds because they have different culture and speak different. So Kurds are those who speak Kurdish, and not Arabic blend with Kurdish language.

 

Multi-cultural societies are a good thing for humans. It makes the world to a more exciting world. In multi-cultural societies people think in different aspects. In the world we live today we have different food, music, language, and clothes. If there was a world where there was just one culture, then we would not have so many choices. People would not think so differently.

 

There are also negative aspects of multi-culture societies. In a multi-culture society people are different some people don’t accept that people can be different, they think that other person in other cultures are stupid and that they are not worth as much as persons in their own culture. For example Hitler wanted to burn all the Jude’s because in his way of thinking only the white, Christian persons were valuable. Therefore if we had just one culture then there would maybe be less war and conflicts.

 

I think that a multi-cultural society is great. It makes this world exciting. Imagine a picture with many air balloons in one color. I think it would be a boring picture. What if we had a picture of many air balloons in many colors? I think the picture with many colors look greater in many ways. Look at the world in the same view, a society with only one culture would be very boring if you ask me!

Endret 14. desember 2009 av sjoan93

[Henrik C]

Would you prefer? a picture of air balloons with only one color, or different colors? A Ssociety with only one culture, or many cultures? I reckon most people would find the latter more interesting, and this might illustrate our society and how people feel about it.

Can you imagine a world where everybody are thinking and acting like each other?

Could you imagine a world where everyone thinks and acts the same?

 

Multi cultural societies are societies where people have different cultures. That means different food, language, clothes, thinking, rules, religion and more. Multi cultural societies are build up by persons with different cultures, and food, language, clothing, social norms and religion will differentiate.Litt usikker på denne setningen, men tja.. Ikke direkte spennende, men den er vel helt brukbar.

Gidder ikke mer nå, men alt hjelper. Hvis det går litt på rundgang, så kan sikkert flere ta et avsnitt hver.

[sjoan93]

oki , takk skal du ha

 

håper noen andre tar resten

[sjoan93]

noen som gidder å gi noen råd, eller tipst for å forbedre stilen min , eller rette den ?