ole_marius Skrevet 2. juni 2009 Del Skrevet 2. juni 2009 (endret) satt å spilte på gitar'n min i kveld og skrev en tekst som jeg ønsker kritikk på, har sikkert også enn del feil på min engelsk så si i fra når dere finner noe feil eller noe som kan forbedres og for all del, ikke ha for store forhåpninger, dette er min første selv skrevende tekst har før øvrig ingen navn på sangen så forslag ønskes også Can you hear that someone needs your help? But you just walked away like nothing ever happend mabye you din't sow them, nor heard them but do you know what? I know why you trying to live in your own world, where no one needs help but take a lesson from this my friend everyone wil be alone some day and then it's good to know you can go to someone for if you read betwin the lines, we are all the same can you see the little boy, scared and alone if i where you, i'll reach out my arm to let him know that i'am here, to let him know that i would help but you just walked away like nothing ever happend what i could see was a little boy all alone but take a lesson from this my friend everyone have been lost some time and then it's good to know that you can ask someone for if you read betwin the lines, we are all the same can you see the lady who cryes in her phone if i where you, i'll reach out my arm to let her know that i'am here and i won't go but you just walked away like nothing ever happend what i could see was a lady one her one but take a lesson from this my friend now it's you who is all alone you have no where to go, you have no one to ask for if you read betwin the lines, we are all the same i sow you sitting on the bench in the park in a cold november night, watching the star all alone i sow a tears on your chin but i sow you, but i din't walked away i reach out my arm and took your hand Endret 2. juni 2009 av ole_marius Lenke til kommentar
Krillekongen Skrevet 3. juni 2009 Del Skrevet 3. juni 2009 satt å spilte på gitar'n min i kveld og skrev en tekst som jeg ønsker kritikk på, har sikkert også enn del feil på min engelsk så si i fra når dere finner noe feil eller noe som kan forbedres og for all del, ikke ha for store forhåpninger, dette er min første selv skrevende tekst har før øvrig ingen navn på sangen så forslag ønskes også Jeg fikset litt feil her og der og endret litt hvor jeg syntes det passet. Jeg synes det var en fin tekst med et fint budskap Håper du lager den like fin med tanke på det musikale også Can't you hear that someone needs your help? You just walked away like nothing ever happened Maybe you didn't see them or hear them I think I know why You're trying to live in your own world where no one needs help Take a lesson from this my friend Everyone will be alone someday and then it's good to know you can go to someone for if you read between the lines, we are all the same can you see the little boy, scared and alone if I were you, I'd reach out my arm to let him know that I am here, to let him know that I would help but you just walked away like nothing ever happened what I could see was a little boy all alone but take a lesson from this my friend everyone has been lost sometime and then it's good to know that you can ask someone for if you read between the lines, we are all the same can you see the lady who cries on her phone if i were you, i would reach out my arm to let her know that i am here and that i won't go but you just walked away like nothing ever happened what i could see was a lady on her own but take a lesson from this my friend now it's you who is all alone you have no where to go, you have no one to ask for if you read between the lines, we are all the same i saw you sitting on a bench in the park on a cold november night, watching the stars all alone i saw tears on your chin i saw you, but i didn't walked away i reached out my arm and took your hand Lenke til kommentar
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